Second one is either self-contradictory, or overly redundant, depending on further context of whether or not the PC can join the clique. If they can't, then the second line is unnecessary. If they can, it contradicts the first line as "her own" is apparently not all that niche a group, and if it's that open, the first line becomes the redundant one that isn't altogether true, rather than the second line.
In that case, it could be shortened to "She's a real diamond in the rough. Emphasis on rough." if you wanted to showcase the roughness element while still denoting the goodness element, especially with the second portion being said louder, implying it to be intended to be overheard and thus a jab against the character.
In the first-line-redundant case, if they wanted them to be besty lezzies, you could go for something along the lines of "...Just don't get her mama bear instincts up.". In half the words, you've implied she's fiercely protective of her clan and that she's kinda bad at social situations around it. It clearly denotes her own family unit, and that she's defensive, but doesn't have the self-contradiction implying you both could, and could not, join into it.
For the third one, to me it sounds like cross-talk that the PC really isn't the intended ear for, but rather, this Naeva is the one meant to be hearing it. So having it said TO the PC, rather than THROUGH the PC towards another listener (Naeva), makes it seem stilted. If you go up to a loving couple, and the man turns to you, zones his wife out completely, and says zoomed in on you "Hello. My wife is very attractive. She performs sex very well." out of nowhere, you don't say that's just background info, it's WEIRD for it to be said to the listener when the subject of the sentence is right there, since the listener isn't the intended recipient of the message, the subject of the sentence is.
But maybe that's the purpose of the message, to showcase that this character IS very weird, stilted, and bizarrely exhibitionistic about their sex partner. But if not, the line would flow better as a background lore dump if it had less purple prose: "Naeva's ambitious, no matter the subject, one of her best traits.".
Of course, if the speaker is some crazed bard fresh from bard school, then yeah, purple prose it up. But I have a feeling they aren't. But if they are, it should be even MORE prosey: "She's got a fire in her. The kind you only see in an engine pushed to its limit. The oil burns brightest in that midnight gloom, my one true shining sparkle in the void of space. I wrote a country-western song about her, want to hear it?"
First one's fine.
Second one is either self-contradictory, or overly redundant, depending on further context of whether or not the PC can join the clique. If they can't, then the second line is unnecessary. If they can, it contradicts the first line as "her own" is apparently not all that niche a group, and if it's that open, the first line becomes the redundant one that isn't altogether true, rather than the second line.
In that case, it could be shortened to "She's a real diamond in the rough. Emphasis on rough." if you wanted to showcase the roughness element while still denoting the goodness element, especially with the second portion being said louder, implying it to be intended to be overheard and thus a jab against the character.
In the first-line-redundant case, if they wanted them to be besty lezzies, you could go for something along the lines of "...Just don't get her mama bear instincts up.". In half the words, you've implied she's fiercely protective of her clan and that she's kinda bad at social situations around it. It clearly denotes her own family unit, and that she's defensive, but doesn't have the self-contradiction implying you both could, and could not, join into it.
For the third one, to me it sounds like cross-talk that the PC really isn't the intended ear for, but rather, this Naeva is the one meant to be hearing it. So having it said TO the PC, rather than THROUGH the PC towards another listener (Naeva), makes it seem stilted. If you go up to a loving couple, and the man turns to you, zones his wife out completely, and says zoomed in on you "Hello. My wife is very attractive. She performs sex very well." out of nowhere, you don't say that's just background info, it's WEIRD for it to be said to the listener when the subject of the sentence is right there, since the listener isn't the intended recipient of the message, the subject of the sentence is.
But maybe that's the purpose of the message, to showcase that this character IS very weird, stilted, and bizarrely exhibitionistic about their sex partner. But if not, the line would flow better as a background lore dump if it had less purple prose: "Naeva's ambitious, no matter the subject, one of her best traits.".
Of course, if the speaker is some crazed bard fresh from bard school, then yeah, purple prose it up. But I have a feeling they aren't. But if they are, it should be even MORE prosey: "She's got a fire in her. The kind you only see in an engine pushed to its limit. The oil burns brightest in that midnight gloom, my one true shining sparkle in the void of space. I wrote a country-western song about her, want to hear it?"
I get none of that from the brief dialog examples we are given.
In fact, all the outrage in this thread seems to stem from the wording of the title.
Which again, I get none of from the examples provided.
Here is a semi legitimate thread about pronouns you can participate in.
https://communities.win/c/KotakuInAction2/p/17r9DoEs6T/youtuber-breakdown-over-pronouns/c/
But it's mostly just a you tubers need to generate clickbait by singling out a straw man.